Could you correct my grammar? I'll give you points for this!?

Question

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional and they make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which was performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, have had a plastic surgery done on her face for more than ten times. Even though, she is still not happy with her outcome of previous treatment.

Answer 1

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional.   They make many requests for additional operations after treatments  performed by a dermatologist or a plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, has had more than ten  plastic surgery operations on her face.  Even so, she is still not happy.

Answer 2

Like Mary, people with body dismorphic disorder, are emotional and they make requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which was performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year old divorced female, name Rebecca, had plastic surgery done on her face more than ten times. However, she is still not happy with the outcome of her previous treatment.

Answer 3

For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, have had a plastic surgery done on her face for more than ten times.  

"have had "

change to "has had"

" for more than ten times.  "

remove the "for"

Even though, she is still not happy with her outcome of previous treatment.

change "though" to "now"

not happy with her outcome

change "her" to "the"

put a put a "her" before "previous"

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional and they make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which was performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, has had a plastic surgery done on her face more than ten times. Even now, she is still not happy with the outcome of  her previous treatment.

Answer 4

Like Mary, people with Body Dysmorphic Disorder are emotional. They make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of treatment which was previously performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old, divorcee named Rebecca has had over ten plastic surgeries done on her face, yet still, she is not satisfied with her outcome due to the previous treatments.

Answer 5

it says have had, instead of has had. it doesn't sound right that you started a sentence with even though, if you want to keep that, you should separate it with a comma, or start the sentence with but. and also, don't say 'for', just keep it more than ten times.

Answer 6

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional and they base requests for additional operations on the outcome of previous treatments, performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example; even though a 46 year-old divorced female named Rebecca has had plastic surgery done on her face more than ten times, she is still not happy with the outcome of previous treatments.

Answer 7

no corrections need to be made. if you have microsoft office in the spell check you can change your settings to check for grammer. all i saw was one sentence that was passive.

Answer 8

Ok put a comma after emotional and beore and. ur always supposed to have a comma before and & but. also take out the comma after divorced female and before named rebecca. u dont need one. then take out the have in have had. it doesnt make sense. just "for example, a 46 year old female named rebecca had plastic surgery" not have had plastic surgery. and then replace even though with although. even though doesnt make sense either.

Answer 9

okay

Like Mary, people with Body Dysmorphic Disorder are emotional and they make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which was performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, has had a plastic surgery performed on her face more than ten times. Even though she is still not happy with her outcome of previous treatment.

Answer 10

Like Mary, people with body dysmorphic disorder are emotional and make many requests for additional operations on their outcome of previous treatment, which is performed by a dermatologist or plastic surgeon. For example, a 46 year-old divorced female, named Rebecca, has had plastic surgery done on her face for more than ten times. Even though, she is still not happy with her outcome of previous treatment.

Answer 11

Bloody Mary