Critique My New Poem: Fighting Death?

Question

Life is all about fighting death

It is amazing game

That has familiar end

Strive hard to delay the fate

Be healthy and follow the rules

Do your exercise

Jog and go on the tread mill

Eat healthy food

Vegetables ad fruits

You can have meat

to your heart desires

Not much cookies, cake and doughnuts

Do not scream for ice cream

You can have a scoop or more

Enjoy the opposite s*x

All its trappings and pleasures

Life does not need

to be mundane and drab

Be careful and follow

The right decision

So when you meet your creator

You will go to heaven

And not be pushed to

You know? h**l

If you believe in cosmos

Pray that you will cruise

Safely in space

And not get sucked

In a black hole

Answer 1

I really like this poem , it's sorta depressing at the end but I liked it. It was really good.

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