Critique My Poem: Do You Realy Love Me?

Question

I wonder do you really love me?

I wonder if you care?

In your eyes lay a mystery

My eyes can not see

In your heart there is a secret

I wish you reveal

When you giggle

I am swept by wonderment

In oceans so deep

Please tell me

So simple and sweet

Do you really love me?

Do you really care?

Answer 1

i think it is really sweet and sincere. it sonds like you hae someone on your mind...

Answer 2

i can sense raw emotion. nice :)

Answer 3

i love the first three lines and the repition at the end, i feel the poem lacks rhythm as i read it more though

i adore that line "so simple and sweet" and "i am swept by wonderment"

Answer 4

Needs a bit of work. Here's a starting point for you to play with.

I wonder if you truly love me,

  I wonder if you really care.

In your eyes lies a mystery

which my eyes cannot discern.

In your heart there is a secret

  I wish you would reveal.

When your laughter ripples

  I am swept by wonderment

In oceans so deep.

  Please tell me,

so simple and sweet.

  Do you truly love me?

Do you really care?