Critique My Poem: Field of Roses?

Question

Swing, swing in vanity

Oh queens of beauty and gaiety

Sing, sing together in chorus

The song of love and emotions

Dance, Dance in the wind

Bend here Bend there in harmony

Oh Beautiful fragrant roses

Swing and dance all day long

Answer 1

What a lovely and visually rich poem.  I love the concept.  And from the title, I get the added visual of a whole field of swaying roses, all singing "in chorus".  Very, very beautiful.  Thank you.

Answer 2

Very different, i really enjoyed it!

Answer 3

for such a short poem I could see the roses dancing and could almost smell them. lol

really good job

Answer 4

its pretty good u were able to feel alot for a small poem i can see the roses

Answer 5

Wow...great job man!

I loved the simple aspect of your subject choice. You made such a simple object so complex in describing its movements. And the way you brought out the silent beauty in what you can't see in the rose physically.

And the whole song just came together, well done =]

keep up the great work!

best of wishes ~m.t.

Answer 6

I love this.  That's what roses do . . . . swing and dance all day.  Well done.

Can't imagine a whole field of them.