Critique My Poem: I Love You in Neon Light

Question

I would write I love you

In neon lights

I would have it in marquee

In down town

In Vegas or the Chanzalize

I will go to Africa

To the Kilimanjaro mountains

And will have sign

I love you on the top

I love you unconditionally

So you know

I will have the sign

Every place you go

I will have it

Even if I go to

Tibet or mountain Everest

So I love you

And you remember that

Any place you go

Answer 1

"and will have sign" is not grammatically correct.  It might sound better with equal syllables every other line.  And it's a bit hard to follow, the last few lines are hard to comprehend.  It's a very sweet idea though, keep working on it!

Answer 2

Great poem. Sentimental.

Answer 3

Fantastic !  

Answer 4

Sweet

Answer 5

i like it. its sweet