Critique My Poem: I like You To Be Mine.?

Question

You are sweet

I want you to be

my girl friend

You are in my mind

day and night

I will buy seven roses

so you know

every day of the week

that I love you

and want you to be mine.

Answer 1

I think it's sweet. :)

Answer 2

It's sweet.

girl friend indicates a friend who is a girl whereas girlfriend is the one you do things with all the time, your sweetheart.

The poem is simple, but that is all right when you are speaking about young love.

Good luck!

T.

Answer 3

i think its sweet whoever your giving that poem to should be one very happy girl

Answer 4

if you were writing that poem for a girl you like you might want to check to make sure she is as illiterate as you are before giving it to her so that she doesn't get the impression that you are some kind of desperate dumb *** posing as a romantic.