Critique My Poem .... Maze of Life?

Question

I walked through Maze of life

I fell and stumbled

I rose up again

I saw the dangers

I saw the fear

Was not always easy

Often hard

Some times

I could not see the way

I looked around

There was mist

I ventured through

Where I am now?

I have walked miles

In journey of life

Answer 1

This maze of life is one heck of a walk.  

I would play with your words more.  My favorite tool is a Thesaurus, the other a dictionary.  

Your question "where am I now?" is a good question.

Lots of people are never aware of this question.

Keep writing!

Answer 2

It's good but you need to throw in something with a wow factor.. something very profound.

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Answer 3

hmmm i think it needs some more near the top...

or maybe its just this part "i walked through maze of life" maybe change that to something else to make everything throw better. its really amazing. keep it up!!

Answer 4

I'm lost once more within the maze

I've been here many times before

And still I find I can't ignore

The subtle signs, the dark displays

Or soon I see a hedge I passed

Ten years ago when last I fell;

A deja vu I can't dispell

Rolls over me, a die that's cast.

And suddenly I know I'm lost

The walls, familiar hem me in

The corridors once wide now thin

And summer breezes turn to frost.

When I was young I thought that when

I reached the age where I now stood

I'd know the pitfalls and I could

Walk through this labyrinth where men

Of other ages passed, but now

I knew my folly, it was great

And now alas the hour was late

And to the darkness I must bow.

Answer 5

I liked it, but it seems to lack a conclusion.  You also might want to include "the" where appropriate