Critique My Poem: Viola Crushed My Heart

Question

Viola crushed my heart

And slipped away

To the far country of New Zealand

To the Hawke’s bay

I gazed the dark skies

I counted the stars

Waiting for a comet

that saw Viola

To fall and flash the sky

I sailed the oceans

I fought the high waves

I met hurricanes

For Viola

Who crushed my heart

And slipped away

Answer 1

Thats sweet. So far, i think ur poem represents ur sacrifice to find ur love of ur life that lies inside viola. Either u have to find her just to show her how u feel or just to take back whats urs is unknown. The point that ure hurt is clear tho'. So, in my opinion, more extension is needed.

Answer 2

I LIKE IT AND I THINK  YOU COULD EXTEND IT EVEN MORE.