Critique My Poem: Viola Love Treasure?

Question

Viola is hungry for love

For sensuous pleasure

When her body shivers

With Joy and ecstasy

When lover have her treasure

Viola is master piece

Of quiet beast

She can devour her lover

Drain him from last drop of power

Viola you have to watch

With Her green eyes

With her ivory figure

Viola is a temple

For worship

To ascend heaven

Answer 1

Hmmm, interesting stuff. There are alot of images that you have here, try going back to them, and try to make it so that you grab the reader more. The part that i liked, was the one were you mentione Viola a masterpiece, try going back and adding more feeling to these images. This poem was good though, could use some work, like any other poem, but overall a good piece. I read like 5 times already, and im trying to figure out what you are talking about. Thats not a problem, but still, there something there that i know im missing. I hope to see this poem posted here again.