Critique a poem, pretty please?

Question

I posted this poem about 20 minutes ago, but it was removed - not sure why. 2 people replied, but I never got to read them. Perhaps someone can tell me what they think of the poem and why it might have been removed.

It is presented here as an example of poetry, not as a religious tract.

PAROUSIA

Ye sons of men, look to the skies,

await the Saviour's bless'd return;

when Christians shall receive their prize

and guilty sinners then shall burn.

So wayward man repent or die,

"I have not sinned", none dare retort.

Our God knows this to be a lie,

for all have sinned and fallen short.

But God's word tells us what we need

to know the joy of second birth;

upon this 'manna' let us feed

that we may live good lives on Earth.

For up above, through Heaven's gate,

unrighteous man has never trod.

If you'd escape the sinner's fate,

prepare yourself to meet your God!

Answer 1

It may have been removed because it DOES sound like preaching.

Answer 2

The poem itself is quite good, but in the first verse you make it sound as if Christians are the only people welcome in heaven.fortunately god forgives all sins.

Answer 3

Answerer one was a numpty who basically advertised his own Question and Answerer two was me! Hooray!

But I did not report you and never would!

I am not a religious person, but your poem seems pretty good!

Doesn't change my opinions about Religion but you seem to have worked really hard on this and given it great thought.

It's nice!

Answer 4

No idea why it may have been removed.

The mixture of old verbiage and new (ye) is destabilizing to the poem's mood. Either be consistently Elizabethan or modern. The approach to the subject matter is slightly bland and overdone. Nothing in this poem stands out as memorable or particularly attention getting. Possible suggestion: Rewrite from a first person POV, either the potentially damned sinner or a person concerned for those who may be lost. The overall impression is heavy-handed.