Critique my new poem? please and thank you.?

Question

"little bird"

birdie, little bird.

have you no home?

sitting in the grass all alone.

birdie, little bird.

sing for your friends!

song should be our end.

birdie, little bird.

chirp pretty for me.

it's dark and i won't see.

birdie, little bird.

please sing that song,

because i can't stay long.

chirp, little bird,

or sing,

or whistle,

or call,

for me,

Birdie, little bird

Answer 1

it's pretty good compared to alot of crapy poems I,ve read.good job!

Answer 2

awwwwww....thats soo cute!!! I think this poem is ok from a scale 1-10 I give you a 7! I think you should add more to this poem, seems like it needs more words!!

Answer 3

cute for an under 12 yo - how old are you?

Answer 4

It's good!

Answer 5

what was your point? what does the bird represent? personally not my taste (though my favorite poet is Edgar Allen Poe) but for little kid i guess it is cute. Good rhythm but still what is the meaning

Answer 6

The first four stanzas are cute.  But the last one seems a bit random (in its structure, that is).

Answer 7

first verse, OK.

second verse, third line, words missing?

third verse, don't get third line

forth verse, should be second verse

fifth verse, i get the feeling little bird  has  to entertain.

Answer 8

i think it's cute. [: