DO U LIKE MY POEM???

Question

here it is:

everyone wants to sit with me

but there isn't enough room around me

my blonde hair is the best for sleeepovers

if only there was enough of it for everyone

my makeup is the best of best

if only i had enough for all of the rest

Answer 1

Blond hair is NOT the best

brains are what pass the tests;

not everyone wants to be you

because your poem is really poo...........sorry :O(

Answer 2

umm is conceited the right word here?

Answer 3

Frankly, I don't like it. It seems like you're way too full of yourself. Plus, when it comes to the the structure and the technicalities of this poem, there are grammar errors, the flow is very choppy and the rhyme scheme doesn't do this poem any justice.

Answer 4

sorry but you sounded kind self centered

Answer 5

I am sorry self absorption has no place in poetry or any where in this world for that matter.

I know you seem to think that you are all that and a bag of chip's and it's alright to have a high self esteem but you come off as being stuck on your self one of the biggest turn offs to all people men and women.

Back to the drawing board.

Answer 6

Makes you sound arrogant and stuck up. Write about something that matters.

I really don't mean to be rude- seriously. It's just my honest opinion that makeup, hair, and popularity have little value.

Answer 7

Bad grammar, spelling, and no reason to the poem.

You won't get famous writing about yourself, unless you suffer. All great artists have suffered.

You sound very self centered, and the rhyme scheme is not right.

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That's unusual.

And the beats per line make it hard to sit through as well.

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The beats per line should be similar, and not to long, or it gets hard to sit though.

Answer 8

I hope thats a joke

Answer 9

No, you seriously don't understand what poetry is about, do you?

Its about sharing the beauty of words, metaphors, and the world as you see it with others. Its not about making a self-centered, stick-it-to-the-rest-of-the-world, I am so awesome things. No one apperciates making it sound like you are the most loved thing in the world...ugh.

Answer 10

umm.. to be honest... no.. you sound self centered