DOES THIS POEM SOUND OK?!?

Question

sadness and anger inside

why jess ?

why such a caring girl?

thats one thing i'll never understand

ill never forget those sparkly blue eyes,

that long blonde hair,

those tom boy clothes,

and your smart *** jokes

you were my best friend,

you still are

and you always will be

i remember all the good times we had,

the long talks on the phone,

play fighting at school,

and the havok we caused with the neighbours next door

we had some awesome times

but now your gone

everythings changed

i just tresure the memories and photos that remain

when i find the brightest star at night

i always think of you

like your lookin down on me

and im lookin up at you

its like i feel like myself again

a sense of comfort i say

im just gutted you were taken so young

i know your probably havin a wonderful time

but all i can do is pray

and hope that one day we see each other again =]...

this is about my mate who sadly passed away

Answer 1

i'm so very sorry.

it's a great poem.

i can feel what you're feeling.

i can see the imagery you're talking about too.

very deep, good job.

again so sorry.

Answer 2

f**k

it brought tears to my eyes

its so sad

wow

this must be a hard time for you

i hope your okay

but the poems great

shell be looking down smiling

Answer 3

Very nice tribute. I hope you heal.

Answer 4

Wow! You must have really been cut down when you lost her. This is a great reminder of her, and all the good times, and I hope that you can still remember her and move on!

Answer 5

That's so sad. :( That is a really powerful poem. I hope everything works out for you.