Dear ESL teachers, please help me proofread the following paragraphs in English ...Thanks a million?

Question

Dear XXXX:

According to the attached file we provide below, we can see an organized chart to analyze the product line. We have categorized our machine models into the different category based on their applications, features, and specialties in the machining industry.

Please deliver this message to your sales team and end-users by which they will have closed understanding on our products. Further more, they will have good chances to select the right product for their use.

best regard

Hank

Answer 1

According to the file we attached below, we can see an organized chart to analyze the product line. We have categorized our machine models based on their applications, features, and specialties in the machining (i think there's no word such as "machining"; use machine or equipment instead) industry.

Please forward this message to your sales team and end-users so they will have better understanding on our products. Hopefully, they will be able to select the right product for their use.

Best regards,

Hank

-we have categorized....no need to mention "into the different category" because you already mentioned that you have categorized it.

-I believe there's no word such as machining or even an industry for  machines in general (brands in the market use industrial machines or commercial machines or more specific such as computer equipment, etc.) But then, I suggest you remove the "in the machining industry".

-don't use deliver, use "forward" instead. Deliver sounds like he's a messenger or courier. Forward is the proffesional and corporate term describing relaying messages.

-furthermore is not appropriate. I believe that the last sentence would be your goal for the whole message. Furthermore is used if the following sentence/phrase will add a significant supporting details to statements you previously stated. Hopefully is more appropriate.

-Don't use "good chances". It sounds like gambling or the reader may feel that you're not confident with your products. Rather, use an active and more positive sentence such as they will be able to select the right...

-Best regards, not best regard

Hope that helps...thanks..

Btw, I'm not an esl teacher. But I do hope that my answer has provided you with what you need.