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Difficult character to name- desciption enc, plz help?

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This is the prologue/opening chapter; cant find a name i love for her character;

The reflection of the moon hit her in face as she leant forward for a better look, scuttling back into the darkness when the patrol passed below her ledge. They weren’t the source of her fear; she knew the maze of the city’s rooftops as well as she knew the ground. She just didn’t want to have to run from them, and circle around to get were she was. What a waste, she thought. The source of the resounding footsteps of the crowns guard was the vast silence caused by the city’s curfew. Anyone caught outside whilst in curfew hours would be held by the crowns guard. That enough set the imaginations of the townsfolk into a flurry.

She crept around the side of the merchants house she was hiding on, careful not to fall through a window. She didn’t even have to try to be quiet, being known for her sleekness back at the stables. Or his sleekness. She grinned as she thought of her new job as a stable boy. For years she’d been running and hiding, a ‘slum’ kid being orphaned at a young age, but recently was able to get a job where she could work with animals. She loved it, but knew the dangers of a young girl in a big city, so kept to herself and acted like a boy. No one asked twice, no girl around here would even contemplate having a boy’s haircut. But it wasn’t just her gender she had to be careful about. There was something else that was entirely dangerous about her; something that she had to guard. Her Ability. The stable boys were already envious about the jumps that she could make easily from the rafters to the ground, so she didn’t think it wise to show them what she could really do.

But that was why she was out at nighttime, scurrying across the rooftops, stretching and leaping, to satisfy the wild side of her.

She reached the end of the building at a fast run, and leapt from the next, to the next, circling around the guards that were on watch. She had a purpose tonight. She had to try. Just to see if she could manage the huge leap onto the crowns night guard watch house, onto the royal building itself; risky, but worth it, she thought with a smile.

She rounded the corner with the grin still on her face, into the arms of the waiting soldiers. They were as startled as she was, but had obviously been waiting for someone else, so were able to slam the baton into her side before she was able to run.

The smile on her lips faded as the darkness swept upon her.

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The girl becomes a servant in the crowns kitchen, and is soon serving the royals. They realise she is a girl and her hair grows back. The knights of the crowns guards are having dinner one knight when one jokingly throws a dart at another knight, one that had saved her from the brutality of the guards that had caught her. She didn’t know it was a joke, and used her ability to catch the dart in mid flight- the men then realise from her outstanding catch that’s she’s one of them; a protector, a mythical race also known as Faeries. They hate that name so they call themselves the protectors. They’ll take her under their wing and train her, as shes the first female with ability. Soon though, they’ll need her as an evil force sweeps through the land....

What would you name her?

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  1. I think that the name should be very simple, nothing to elaborate, but at the same time different. Something like Malva. Nothing with a y in it (at least not in the middle). One or two syllables. And something easy to pronounce. For some reason I see a person with an m name.

    Magda, Mela, Saphira, Isla (eye la)

    The book sounds really good bye the way. What does she look like? Hair color eye color etc.


  2. Minna or Asima both mean protecter and guardian. I personaly like Catriona.

    Good story, i like it =).

    Or samantha , because she could have them call her sam.

  3. Fay, Fiona, Yara, or Rosie

  4. Ory, Rizelly, Hiale, Corue, or Zulie.

    I personally like Ory or Corue.

    Rizelly is cute though :D

  5. Arabella, but she tells them her name is Aran.

  6. Something starting with the letters 'La'....Lakota, Lastella,

  7. Lisbet...it's a play on the name Elizabeth.

  8. Lanet, Kana, Kanara, Angela, Juna, Rosetta, Fayme or maybe Marvela.

    Good luck with your story, it sounds very good.

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