Distracted by Life?

Question

Distracted by Life

Onto a path I walk,

Path of opportunity,

Deciding my future,

The future for me.

Experiments occur

Try and try again,

Learning from my past.

Focus, look ahead.

One foot infront of the other

And I've lost where im going.

Thousands of people around me,

Keeping my heart from showing

If i fell to my knees one day

Would you laugh at me?

Or would you hide behind your leader

Controlling you, but you cant see.

Sucking me in,

While my body says no,

Realizing now,

It's time to let go.

To get back on the path,

That i once was on,

Hopefully opportunity

Wont already be gone

Down a pebble path I walk,

Just waiting to see

Into the future I've decided

Focussing on me.

Answer 1

It is easy to get distracted by life, I like how this poem portrays that aspect.  Once I begun reading it, I could not stop.  It really drew me in.  

Your word choices were really well played out and unlike my poetry yours does have a POINT and a very vivid one too.  My personal style is to leave the reader confused but in awe, that is what I hope for.  But I realize it is very different for other writers.  

Nice Job!

Answer 2

We are often distracted by things we can't control.  I like your poem, keep up the good work!!!

Answer 3

Its...perfect.