Do You Like My Poem? Please Read And Tell Me!

Question

Okay Here Is The Poem:

Stuck in these four walls to hear all,

Waiting for emotions to stop showing,

Block out the world as my mind flows,

Close my eyes to see beauty far from here,

It is not a life but a dream,

Time to stop shedding these butterfly tears.

Please Tell Me What You Think!!

Answer 1

I am not entirely sure, I think u could make this much more powerful by by making the reader focus more on the powerful words than on all the little words that tell a 'story'. We can read poetry and understand it without the use of of all those small words Eg: 'Blocked out world, mind flows on" or "Not life, just a dream" "closed eyes see far off beauty"

It's just a suggestion, to make each word more powerful and emotive. And it's a suggestion that has been given to me before and I believed it has helped me a lot in my own poetry, hope it helps you with yours.

Good Job.

Answer 2

it's good! It's a lot better than i can do

Answer 3

It is a good start, but I believe you should develop it more.

Answer 4

your poem is good i like it  

Answer 5

Wow thats fantastic!!!!!  

Answer 6

it is good! i really like ur style of thinking/writing! continue to achieve ur goals/dreams.