Do u like my other poem?

Question

pink, green, blue

wat shirt shall i choose?

im at the store with my endless card

not knowing wat to do.

should i buy three or two?

wat to do o wat to do

i leave unsatisfied with a shirt

and just one pair of shoes......

Answer 1

shallow and childish. no offense, but true.

Answer 2

let me guess, you're american.

it's stupid.

just being honest :]

Answer 3

i feel its kind of childish. but i love the fact that it rhymes.

please check  on my question:

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...

Answer 4

it is people like you that are the origin of the blonde stereotypes. yo are an idiot and this is not poetry.

Answer 5

its ok. it rhymes but its shallow. poems are meant to have a deeper meaning

Answer 6

'wat' is spelled what. 'i' is capitalized also. The poem sounds like only a rich girl could appreciate, maybe sent it to Paris Hilton. But its yours, write what you want.

Answer 7

you my dear are what we humans call the next Paris Hilton.

no talent.

Answer 8

Panini,

Sometimes bad criticism is a part of the game in this post and to tell you the honest truth your prose need a lot more work! You do have imagination working heavily in your favor and I'm read a lot worse, but we as a group who are supposed to give honest opinions should be a little more courteous to the author! If you want to be taken seriously as a writer here you must up your game with every entry you submit for the opinion of your peers. Some people have read my serious side in this post, but I have the sweet childish side just like Frosted Mini Wheats! Here's a freebie...

ANY COLOUR YOU WANT

Red, Pink, Green, Blue

What colour clothes do you think I'll choose?

Plain, Plaid, Dots, Stripes

What is the style that I'm wearing tonight?

Cotton, Cords, Silk, Knit

I don't know what to wear and I'm having a fit

It's up to everyone

To pick any colour you want

Turn yourself around

Everyone!

I want to be a fashionable guy

I want a suit with a matching tie

Don't need a girl with those fashion blues

How 'bout a hat and a new pair of shoes?

It's up to everyone

To pick any colour you want

Turn yourself around

Everyone!

Everyone!

There, you go girl! I can be a freak when I hit the boutique...

Grade  D+.  Come with your Prada or it's 'nada'...

Answer 9

brilliant poem!