Do u like this poem i wrote?

Question

If you go it will be a drama.Everyone loves a drama lets light up the stage. When the lights go out.we will dance.As she stared into the night was the castle dressed in white. ill tell you what it is. walk down these tradgic steps it so fitting. find a safe place we shall talk i lover her too much. This was the perfect murder The perfect murder In the ballroom with a glass, remembering it all at last The memory of her first kiss led to a series of unfortunate events She'll dance to the sound of the clock striking twelve.i found a cure.

Answer 1

it's not structured..

it doesn't focus on one thing

its subject needs to be stated

Answer 2

It has no meaning!

Your spelling and grammar are truly horrible!



When you write a poem, at least capitalize the first letter of the first word. You should do that anyway!

I don't want to be mean, but if you really like writing poetry, then you should use proper grammar. For example, the second sentence needs a comma between drama and lets.

Plus, make sure your sentences are understandable. The 4th sentence about the castle doesn't make sense.

If you really like poetry, then start with haikus. I always find those easier.

Answer 3

Your grammar is atrocious. It sounds as though you just strung together as many "cool" sounding words as you could think of, without taking the time or the effort to give your "poem" any semblance of a theme, or any meaning at all for that matter.