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Question

I was so smart they said I should of been a scientist

I have crazy visions in my mind thats why I need a psychiatrist

I look in the dictionary to find a random word

Then I turn nouns and adjectives into verbs

Im a Jesus so Im holden Gods rifle

I know stuff that you wasnt ment to find like the Lost Books out of the Bible

Im fighten war everyday so Im a Jesus in the battle

I know what you thinkin he must be a Christian

That just shows how much you listen and pay attention

Because a real man of God dosent need a religion

All he need is God and his family not those old traditions

You must be ignorate to think the end is near

Cause our father God would never scare you and have you in fear

You want to see God and Jesus its simple look in the mirror

We are all Gods and powerful beyond measure

Since I found this message I feel like a pirate finding lost treasure

Im saying the truth thats why its so insane

This might be insane but God and the Devil really are the same

We do good and bad thats how we are the Devil and God

Your getting closer to the answer just turn the door nob

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Answer 1

i think that it is a good piece of writing but i don't believe in it... but keep writing because i think that it is a good poem

Answer 2

AE3Magic,I love the imagery! But with this couplets style, rhythm is important. But if these are song lyrics, then the pairing of long and short prose means nothing... There are some who would dispel your written beliefs within this sonnet and say you are blasphemous, but it is only a poem... 

Grade A -  You are too serious in some of the work, I would lighten it up for entertainment purposes.

IN THE IMAGE OF GOD

I was so smart I could've been a mad scientist

Crazy enough to outwit a psychiatrist

Never knew a comedian who could be this absurd

You can call me Dan Webster I'm a man of few words

Sometimes I'm a zealot my position is tribal

I get lost in the sauce like Lost Books from The Bible

I'm fightin' war everyday even Jesus has to battle

It's like your going upstream without an oar or a paddle

Now I know what you're thinkin'

That he must be a Christian

And even though the ship is sinkin'

He'll stick to his own religion

All I need is God and family

Not all those old traditions

And if you don't understand me

Then you aren't paying attention

Don't fall into the trap thinking the end is near

Cause the end has been coming year after year

God and Jesus is inside you just look in the mirror

God is love the Devil is anger and fear

We can all be gods with power beyond measure

I have found his message with a buried treasure

I feel so blessed I feel as light as a feather

That I can dwell in the house of the Lord forever

They say I'm insane but I'm telling the truth

I had this in my heart from my early youth

And I'm not afraid to shout it out from the highest roof

Gods and devils live inside you I can show you proof

Answer 3

your spelling needs to be tuned up :

line 1 : ...I should have been a scientist"

line 2 ...that's why

line 5 ..I'm ....so I'm

line 6...stuff that you weren't meant ..

line 7 ...I'm fighting war

line 8 ..what you're thinking

line 10.. does not need

line 11 ..all he needs..

line 12 ...ignorant..

line 14...it's simple

line 17 ...I'm saying ...it's so insane

line 19 ...that's

line 21 ...that's

line 22 ..you're getting ..,...the door k**b ..

I think most are typing errors ( missing apostrophes ) but it does spoil your poem !:-))

This is a powerful message *ae3magic !

Good and evil in everyone  yes .The dark side of us . Angels and fallen angels ..The yin and the yang ..Well done !

(I am not sure that you want to publicize your email address though?? hum ?)