Do you have time for another five lines?

Question

"Paper Dreams" - a cinquain

I thought

I was breaking,

but it was just good-bye.

Who would have thought it could hurt

so much?

Answer 1

Here are some lines you can use

As my eyes close that one night

That one goodbye could all thats left

Answer 2

5 lines

50 lines....

It matters not when coming from you.  

This sounds as if you have lost someone close, and yes, good bye hurts, especially if you have been close.  Have a virtual hug from a truly old, old f**t who cares.

Answer 3

Some of the worst pain is experienced in a goodbye. These five lines have said a lot.

Answer 4

A hard lesson to learn.  Thanks for this beautifully written reminder.

Answer 5

I love the Cinquain. Miss Crapsie was quite a poet. You have done it well here.

Answer 6

Sentimental, good flow, like a small poetic soliloquy. Nice work.

Answer 7

Eighteen words with lots of time needed to reflect on them. This shows how so much can be said in few words. Now, if I could only get this concept to the other poets on this site...

Answer 8

Who thought i could break

So fast

So quick

Then poof

I die

Good-bye

Answer 9

This is how you do it! Find your Muse in little bits at a time.... It is working in your, oh so bittersweet style... thank you for sharing this beauty Eva...

Love, Siren

Answer 10

With so little you have said so much.

Answer 11

I like it. I feel the sorrow.