Do you know of sky burial? What think ye of my poem?

Question

Sky Sepulchre

sharp knives slashing

scalp ripped away

pounded battered

pieces sent astray

incense smoldering

whistle is blowing

Arrive, depart

rippling pools growing

flesh givimg way

away... away... away

Sky burial or ritual dissection was once a common funerary practice in Tibet wherein a human corpse is cut into small pieces and placed on a mountain top, exposing it to the elements or the mahabhuta and animals – especially to birds of prey. In Tibetan the practice is known as jhator (Tibetan: bya gtor), which literally means, "giving alms to the birds."

Gao Xingjian has a poem on Sky Burial but this is not a direct translation, it is my poor attemt to visualize it in an alternate way.

Answer 1

in my opinion, i absolutely love this poem, not that in like emo or sumthing. i just like the use of rhymes and...... i just like poetry is all. :p

Answer 2

That is quite a description, of the first half of the scene. I was waiting for the birds of pray to show in the skies, just like in real life.Ur poem style reminds me of a ( Louisianian) poet I know. Thanks for sharing it w/ us.

Answer 3

Stark, visionary, extremely graphic, interesting.