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Question

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http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AlD5GEhX2M2jFWhXucmJ.EHsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20080820011145AA3GOu2

ok now i have made a poem relating to that question here it is-

Olympic poem – Excellence

I dive in

The time has come, it’s so quick

Dive in that cold water, just for gold

Is my pace, good enough for the race?

I thrive forward

I’m tired should I go on?

I splash and dash

They cheer me on

My coach is jumping

I leer my opponent

He is leading

I focus with all my sense

The race is fast

I touch the wall

I feel tall

I did my best lets see the rest.

I’m breathless did I win?

I finished first nevertheless

I achieved my goal

Did I break my record?

I’m on a roll!

The race has ended

The crowd is proud

I now stand on the podium

Holding gold for the eighth time

In front of a wild stadium

Feeling the best!

the end

Do you like it?

Does it ryhme?

What moment do you think it was?

does it work/ and flow?

Rating?

Comments?

Feedback please?

Answer 1

its really nice i think its reflects the spirit of healthy competition

Answer 2

Nice poem. Its about Micheal Phellps and it rhymes slightly but I love it that way. Great poem!