Do you like my Spring Haiku? I am reposting this.?

Question

Bears wading downstream,

Salmon ripe for the picking,

Watch out for hunters.

Answer 1

3 lines simply stating the obvious. In my humble opinion, anyone who thinks this constitutes poetry is seriously deluded. So, no...I don't like it. (You did ask.)

Answer 2

This is a Con-verb as well as an Ameri-Ku. We are not sure what/whom to watch out for. Are the hunters the bears? The humans implied? Very interesting.

Answer 3

this is so Con-verbial!  And ku as well.  I really like this thought provoking

little jewel!

Answer 4

The only part of your haiku that comes into question is L3.  A haiku is taking a picture and describing it with words.  "Watch out" is advice given by the writer, thereby entering the picture, who then it is no longer just an observer.  Haiku are never capitalized -- this comes from the Japanese culture.

Personally, I love the 'ku, I think is it clear, sharp, new, and intriguing.

T.

Answer 5

I like it!

Isn't it amazing to watch bears fish?

Answer 6

bears.. it seems the fish need to watch out... but also the bears.. for lurking somewhere is a man with a gun? perhaps? Is it legal to hunt bears in the spring?

I sincerely like this short sweet and yes .. picks at the brain.

Answer 7

  Yes i do like it a lot as it's nice and sad at the same time..

Answer 8

I like it. Thought provoking. Nice job.

Answer 9

Very Ku. This has all the proper elements; nature, seasons, reasoning. A star for Judith. Origato gozimus.

Answer 10

Yes I do,,,,The hunter could could be either or ,,,

Animal or human ,,,,,definetely makes you think ,,,,,

Good Job,,,,

Hydro,,,you crack me up!!!