Do you like my friend's poem? She really wants to know!?

Question

Nothing

I've got nothing to live for,

Whats the point of life,

We're all living just to die,

Pain and heartbreak's all I feel,

Hurt and torment's what is real,

Lies are scattered in my brain,

My heart is shattered once again,

My blood is drowning me,

AndI'm dyeing ever so slowly,

Leave me suffering.

Answer 1

She sounds like she's suffering from something, like a depression. Its a good "stressed and emo" poem.

Answer 2

No it is terrible.  Poetry has to express some meaning in the meaningless, beauty in the pain, etc.  This is just a self serving pity party.  Not good at all.

Answer 3

hmm.. sound good but it does sound sad and humor kinda at the same time. Good Job to your friend.

Answer 4

sure...if you like creepy, suicidal, emo poems, no offense. my advice for you or i mean your "friend" is to live life to the fullest. it says we're all living just to die. thats why you make the most of your life, have fun while you can, and dont let anything hold you back. ive had my heartbroken before too, and i know it seems like the worst feeling in the world, those guys are no good you, dont try to rush yourself into any kind of relationship until you can actually trust a guy with your heart. for now, i would suggest just stay single, and have fun with your friends. if you let the guys know that your sad over it that'll just make them want to do it again and they dont care about your feelings, but if you dont let it get to you and you move on with your life he'll want you back eventually and you should tell him no tell him he's already broke your heart once and your not gonna let him do it again, then he can see how it feels. take your mind off the negative and focus on teh positive. if your friend needs somebody to talk to tell her she can email me at [e-mail]  trust me, ive been down this path before hun, and its leading to a few months of being miserable, have fun and take your mind off of all the stress.

Answer 5

it is very deep. but also very EMO

Answer 6

the rhyme sound a tad childish making the whole "seriousness" of the poem seem almost comical.

Answer 7

uh not really. its very hard to keep a correct beat of the poem and rythm. but i could see my chemical romance or papa roach sing this song

Answer 8

may i please put it on my myspace?

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Answer 9

It's cool.  I used to write stuff like this, but I was also really suicidal.  A few attempts as well, but all failed thank goodness.  Heart is shattered?  No guy is worth it.  Tell her she will meet a better guy down the line.  Heartbreak is a part of life unfortunately.  The line "my blood is drowning me."  Sounds like that song from Evanecense.  Bid my blood to run, until I come undone.. Save me.. Save me blah blah blah...

Answer 10

i like it even though its so dark. but she's being honest and is telling the truth. i liked line six when she said that hurt and torment is real. its like she's saying that life is tough. overall i like it.

Answer 11

I've read alot of poems like this. Maybe a better to place to be asking this is allpoetry.com. It's a online community that incourages critique fo poetry.

To be honest, this poem sounds like a cry for help.

Answer 12

no

it souds like shes gothick

and its scary

Answer 13

First off I am going to guess your friend is emo or goth or some weird c**p like that second off no i hate this song. Listen to this and listen good. In the real world no one truly cares about your feelings so don't complain about all your "pains and woes and miseries" because there are people who have gone through FAR FAR worse so please don't complain about how bad your life is until you've been in everyone's shoes. and besides GET OVER IT everyone has something bad happen to them its life but you don't hear everyone complaining do you?? No so stop just stop

Answer 14

I know sometimes life's tough and all but you know what?  It will all come to pass.  We've all been through rough patches at one point in our life but we get to rebound eventually.  Sorry, it's not very good and it sounds like your friend is a major drama queen.  Tell her to go out and take a walk or something, maybe the lies will scatter in the wind...

Answer 15

yeah it's good....but it sounds like a suicide note!!!

you'd better watch out for your friend, girlie......

Answer 16

sounds like every amateur cliche poem I have ever heard. Try something original!

Answer 17

the user "cribber" said it was horrible... and without meaning?

that makes no sense. this girl must've been going through something and used her true feelings to write this. if thats not meaning, i don't know what is.

it's sad if she feels that way, but if its just a poem, it might help people to relate to it

Answer 18

It sounds like she's wannabee emo... like, she thinks that she's deep and all that, but she's not. Like::

And I quote && unquote:

"Nothing

I've got nothing to live for

What's the point of life

We're all living just to die"

It just sounds like she's a faux emo.

Answer 19

umm it just sounds like a bunch of random sayings or just sad words put together!! sry personally i dont like it..

Answer 20

It's not that good. It's very amateur and it doesn't really go anywhere. Sorry.