Do you like my new Haiku???????????????

Question

Rose buds bloom in spring,

Sparkling crystal clear Perl shines,

Rainbow appears bright

Answer 1

Your Hai'ku thingies are better than most we see here. However, they cannot be called true Hai'ku, mostly because they are not written in Japanese.

There is a thing called American Haiku. Still, not the same thing.

You follow the rules well. You speak of a season and you describe an element of nature, but, there are hundreds of other rules.

One of the most important is, you must have one line (usually first or last) that contradicts or redirects the story line.

Don't be discouraged, you can write. You can call them Wangerbazoos, if you want. They are beautifully structured free form poems.

TD

Answer 2

Yes Gal, another uplifting effort. Well done. You are illuminating my Tassie darkness. Not sure if the sun will appear at all today.

Please don't be offended, but I think you do haikus better than Con-verbs. I think you have found your springboard. (excuse the pun).

Answer 3

Very bright, you and this poem. A bright poem by a bright lady.

Answer 4

There are more forms of Haiku than the 5-7-5 one. In my opinion, they cannot be written in any language but Japanese. You do very well with these poems; you have real talent for description.

When I write stuff like this, I generally call them "American Ku," an expression I may or may not have created.

Answer 5

Its cute. I like it.

Hope I was of help :)

Answer 6

it's nice, but what do you mean by Perl? Perl, Germany? also, "rainbow appears bright" doesn't really close it. i know it's only a three line poem, but it still should have a conclusion that isn't quite so open.

the form is perfect though.

Answer 7

ITS CUTE!! you used some nice and beautiful words there!!! =]