Do you like my poem, it took me about 2 minutes to write, haha. rate it!?

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Regrets. by Jayne Jancys [8-23-08]

Remembering the days when I could tell you anything,

when you were mine and I was yours.

The days of endless laughs and smiles so rich and warm,

it was like the sun on the Summer sidewalk.

So full of fire, powerful.. dangerous,

but I knew you'd hold onto me forever and never let it burn me.

Then my heart ran in all different directions,

wondering if I still loved you.

It scared me to think this could be over.. so quick,

without even a moments notice.

I asked myself can I lose another love?

No, my heart would split into millions of jagged pieces,

never to be completed.

so then my heart wandered away and I told you we needed this to end,

the sacrifice I made for you, letting myself slip away into your control.

I was scared and let you go, you didn't argue or fight,

you just said whatever makes you happy.

It killed me that you thought this would make me happy,

but I was dying inside.. waiting for myself to heal.

My regrets, unspoken words,emotions, feelings..

to never be said again.

Open my eyes, let my heart find a way through, lay back in this empty field,

remembering the days I could tell you anything.

When you were mine and i was yours,

smiles and happiness are gone.. just left with agony.

I hear your voice and I cringe,

feeling jealous and cold when I think you might find another girl.

The venomous rage of wanting you back,

taking over my soul.. I need you.

but I know this can and will never be,

more than just a fantasy.

farewell my friend, goodbye my love..

forever in my heart and my dreams.

this was what i thought when i first ended things with my boyfriend, but it turns out I'm a lot happier without him =] sad, but true.

I want your opinions and reviews please!!

Answer 1

It is kind of creepy how extreme our emotions can be at any one moment.  Pretty good.

Answer 2

reminds me of an alesana song. lol. all of their songs are about breakups and stuff. it sounds good though i really ilke it.

it's simple but it has a lot of meaning.

stupid kevin you are better without him.

Answer 3

well I fell asleep after the first paragraph of your novel and then I was remembering the days when you were...........errr I mean I don't really care for this too much, well the whole poem that is because I finally read it and felt like splitting my heart into millions of jagged pieces so I would never have to read something like this again.

Farewell my friend, goodbye my love......  well just F***ing good bye I mean,....