Do you like my poem? Let me know what you think?

Question

Weeping willow with your tears running down,

why do you always weep and frown?

Is it because he left you one day?

Is it because he could not stay?

On your branches he would swing,

Do you long for the happiness that day would bring?

He found shelter in your shade,

he thought his laughter would never fade.

Weeping willow stop your tears,

for there is something to calm your fears.

You think death has ripped you forever apart,

but I know he'll always be in your heart.

Answer 1

Dumba$$ you got this from My Girl!

Answer 2

i agree it needs more added to it

im sure it could be better its kind of boring

Answer 3

umm.. i don't think you wrote that poem because i remember that from the movie " my girl" ??? the little girl wrote that poem nice try ;]

Answer 4

Very well done! Brava!  

and keep on writing poetry, you've got a way with words.

Answer 5

aw i liked it.

it had so much meaning in it.

i love the rhyming in it too.

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Answer 6

This poem has a goood rhythm in it and is a good poem. The only bad thing about it is that you need similies, metaaphors, Onomatopeia, sibilance, etc to give it a better and more deeper meaning

Answer 7

nice but i knoW DEEP DOWN YOU CAN CHANGE IT GO FOR GOLD!

Answer 8

its, nice, but you should add more too it