Do you like my poem? What do you think of it?

Question

"On the Inside of me"

My face portrays the innocence i possess

On the outside do I look weak?

Is it just me or do people judge me by my cover?

Is it my covering it up?

Deep down inside do i want to be thought of as a sweet innocent girl?

On the outside its drapped with accessories and hair-dos.

On the inside I'm screaming for someone to let me out.

What am I really?

Dying on the inside and happy on the out?

Or am i just plain miserable?

These Questions i ask myself

Do I tell people I'm not because I don't want them to know what I feel?

Who could find out besides me?

The one person who knows you better than anyone.

Was i asking for a refuge with eyes or my heart?

They say i hide behind my image of happiness to keep my secret deep down ,

What if i put on a fake smile?

Would they notice that I am a liar or would they be fooled?

Answer 1

It is boring and choppy and has no substance at all. Sounds more like a questionnaire about yourself you are going to be giving to your family and friends to see if they truly care or not about you. It isn't even a poem; it is a quiz about you. This can be taken in a whole other direction that does not come off self involved and petty.

Answer 2

i like this poem . its really filled with emotion and i kno what the poem is saying and therefor ill act smart and say some wise old saying dont judge a book by its cover

Answer 3

this is the best poem i heard all day that is why i made u one:

When I look into your eye’s I am left breathless.

For I see a prism of life.

I see in your eye’s the past.

The lost years of joy.

Days yearning to relive.

I see in your eye’s the present.

The comfort you give to me.

The feeling of bliss that washes over me when I look upon you.

I see in your eye’s the future.

The hope of happier days to come.

Knowing a life’s search is fulfilled.

When I look into your eye’s I am left breathless.

For never have I seen anything as beautiful as you.

email me back if u like it

Answer 4

it is good....well you better show yourself honey.....hiding from your own shadow is not good....for you will never be happy at all. loneliness will creep at you day and night....and it will haunt you forever....so shine honey...am not a poet....but i do understand them......wish for you..

Answer 5

pretty good. i bet you could do better