Do you like my poem?!

Question

I wrote it myself. Here goes. It's called:

"Cheese"

I love cheese,

although it makes me sneeze.

I will steal all the cheese from the rats,

and smash them on my door mat.

If it makes me fat,

I will hit myself with a bat.

Cheese is so good,

when you're posted up in the hood.

If you don't like cheese,

you bes believe!

Hope you guys liked it (:

Answer 1

No...it doesn't make ANY SENSE whatsoever. Poems aren't just about rhyming they should convey a feeling, tell a story, or evoke. Your poem doesn't accomplish anything and comes across as juvenille and pointless.

Answer 2

mmmmmmm made me want to take cheese from a rat lol

good job

Answer 3

mmmm.. cheeeessseeeee....... so good in sooo many different ways  

Answer 4

lol its awesome n it rhynes i love it

Answer 5

great, now i want cheese on toast lol