Do you like my poem ?

Question

Olympic gold medal

One hundred stars lack the brightness of a moon

Hence ‘tis the moon that symbolizes the medal of gold

Gold that hath in it profit of power yearned to behold

Let thou game be matched, as Olympic flame haste in tune

Olympic torch

High up in the stadium, defiance of riots and corrupt weather

Doth mark the Olympic flames, lively as any hurtle athlete

Alas, only seventeen days thou given life to complete

Thee flame shall diminish, as Olympic spirits collapse slowly together

To win

A medal shall not prevail upon an athlete by nay a plead nor a tear

‘Tis with the effort and faith, motive and the cue for thou passion

Twice two years, striving for the proud image of one’s nation

Every breath inhaled, waits upon the moment to exhale a cheer

Answer 1

hmmmm don't like the concept and topic but it's still well written!

Answer 2

August...

I really like your poem

I read it while at home

I'm not tall, but I'm not a gnome

I will send you a postcard while in Rome...

LOL...:)

Answer 3

Pretty full on with the old english feel to it.

If it was a bit more simplified id love it

Answer 4

u wrote it very well. i wouldn't have even thought to say some of those big words. but its kinda cheesy. its like when i was in seventh grade and my teacher gave me a particular topic and then told me to write in stanzas but to be creative and not follow punctuation rules.

its still really good tho

Answer 5

It has potential. Nice work keep at it.