Do you like my poem.?

Question

The Sun Shines Down

The sun shines down on my head

with such powerful rays of light

Gleaming with joy until the end of my life.

From light we are born and into darkness we lye

fighting with every last breath inside of me for that glorious beam of light.

The light has dim and darkness creeps within

But i will always remember that glorious sun

Like a crown of glory it will gleam

Until the end of my days

The sun will shine down upon me.

Answer 1

I appreciate it. keep on going!

Answer 2

grade C...needs polish, some images are good (eg. "crown of glory")

Some need changing (eg. "dim and darkness")  keep trying