Do you like my poem that I wrote?

Question

Here it is. Please be honest.

I think about what it would be like to be some other penguin on Club Penguin while on the beach. I just realized I'm sunburnt. Except I don't care. Who is the person that is that penguin? Or that one? It's a world of possibilities and wonders. What is their life like? How is it like mine? How is it different? Would it be hard to be that person? Or would it be easy? My mother finds out that I'm sunburnt.She says when we get home from the beach I'm in trouble. I go put sunscreen on andgo to the pool. Then beside the pool I fall in.

Answer 1

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 2

this needs to definitely be distilled.  

maybe a haiku?

stick with the spirits though not those distilled.