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Question

Darkness

The depth of darkness in the night,

It's like a fairy tale,

waiting for magical creatures to come and rescue me,

as I lay in fear, pure terror,

awaiting to hear a voice,

images and thoughts from darkness,

make you contemplate.

The depth of darkness in the night,

It's like a fairy tale,

remember the past,

await the future,

pure terror of the present,

make you contemplate.

Answer 1

interesting... but the first and second stanzas are too similar...

Answer 2

You could also call this "Contemplation"  since "Darkness" is so obvious and the subject is mind imaginings that occur in the darkness before slumber.

I'd re-work the second stanza because it's such a duplication of the first and doesn't say anything new.  Write On!

Answer 3

Not bad... what do you think of mine?

From darkness we came,

through darkness we go,

toward darkness we maintain.

Wherever we go

there's never a glow

and in darkness we will remain.

Take my hand

together we'll stand

and in darkness we will grow.