Do you like my "song" ?

Question

This is my FIRST song... so don't blame me if it's bad. Haha.

Things would be a lot better

If we were together now

Everything seems to make sense when I'm with you

I feel lost and unwanted when you're not here

I wake up each morning to see you walk by

And you’d be in my mind for the rest of the day

I have all of this love and it’s just for you

I just want you to know the truth

But I don't have the guts to tell you

I am sick and tired of hiding my feelings

Because I want to be more than just friends

What if one day you find someone else?

Would you forget about me?

Would I have to forget about you?

I try to get you to notice me

But I always fail

I don't blame you

Because no one ever does

I am afraid to tell you the truth

I am scared that you will reject me

Maybe you'll live your whole life without knowing

What I truly think of you

And if I tell you the truth, what would you say?

Would you leave and never come back?

I wonder this everyday

There is not much that I can do

But try to change

And I will change just for you

Because I love you ♥

Well??

Should I make any changes?

Thanks :)

Answer 1

It's awesome you could have a great future as a songwriter! ^_^

I'm trying to get into songwriting myself but i'm nowhere near as good as you i think.

Answer 2

Wow, thats REALLLY good!

Answer 3

it's awesome. now the question is? can i borrow it to send to the girl i like? please?

Answer 4

its really good ... I tried to sing it and put a tune to it and it just sounds horrible..   hahaa      (my voice and the tune.. not the song)

=]]

good job

Casey*