Do you like my really short poem?

Question

im only 14, and wrote this in a really short time.

Down a windy road,

you see forests green,

mountains cold.

Why cant you stop to smell the rose?

You strive to live,

clouded vision,

death comes.

stop a moment,

before all is lost,

soul is torn,

memories gone

life is short,

why not stop to smell the rose?

Answer 1

Very muddly, neither fish nor fowl

Answer 2

Ur really short poem is lot better than Ur short poem.

a better rhythm & better rhyme ..

however.. U may need to add some spices.. s.a

mountains DRIPPING cold.

It is cool.. keep on writing .. U 'v got the talent .

Answer 3

this is really cool im 14 and no where near writing a poem this good.... you can get a carrer with this =]

Answer 4

That is a very good poem!!! Keep up the good work!

Answer 5

Good poem .  Also good rhythm

Answer 6

I think it's a lovely poem!  I like it very much;  my only comment would be to take the word "green" out and say something like

Down a windy road

you see forests warmth

mountains cold.

Why can't you stop to smell the rose?

How's that?