Do you like my short poem?

Question

im only 14.

I ran through

skies of blue.

On these valleys green.

Over mountains tall,

across the great wide sea.

I see your face,

it calls to me,

yearns for me.

For forgotten times.

Many days,

sleepless nights.

Runaway,

to a better place.

The wind it tears at my soul.

Like a knife of ice,

heart lay unfold.

life that has barely begun,

it ends that day,

by love never sung.

My love,

you will never see me again!

Answer 1

U started in reverse .. U should kept it that way.. If I was U .. I 'd 'v said :

I ran through

skies blue..

could see nothing

but the face of you..

Such revers  .. 'd b fine for rock & metal songs .. good luck.

Answer 2

nice poem.. thanks for the comment on mine. and honsetly ignore those stupid jereks who say that oh ur only 14 yadahada cuz im 13. =P

Answer 3

I like it, its very descriptive, yet leaves a lot to the imagination.

Awesome!

Answer 4

I'm not a fan of poetry, but never mention how old you are when asking someone to review your poems.  If you do that, you're undermining the poem and letting them 'review a poem from a 14 year old,' and they might add a pity vote for you.

Answer 5

Its nicely said....not bad.