Do you like these lyrics,i have 2 songs recorded already?

Question

change my selfish ways"new lyrics i co-wrote

change my selfish ways

you say i am so selfish

trying to always get my way

when it comes to your needs

i seem to look the other way

now your leaving me behind

its tearing me apart

if you leave for good my dear

it will break my aching heart

chorus

i'll change my selfish ways

please hear me out my dear

i'll take care of your needs

am i making this clear

your love means the world to me

so lets give it one more shot

kiss me ,let me show you

show you what i've got

my thoughts keep going back

to the way you used to love me

i'm wanting it back,the "i love you"

what went wrong,now i see

i understand why you want to go

should've shown you more love

i promise i'll show you now

our problems we can rise above

chorus here

bridge

baby don't go don't leave me

i'll change my ways i swear

just come and hold me close

to the heavens i'll take you there

Copyright © 2008 Amy Marie Col lins & Julie Perez

All Rights Reserved

Answer 1

They are not bad lyrics. You did the rhyming well. However, they don't really stand out to me. They seem a little bit cliche and predictable. For example, in the first verse, as soon as I read, "its tearing me apart" I knew something about a broken heart would be in the next rhyme before even reading it.

So, they're not terrible, but they aren't amazing either. Just ok.