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Question

Jamie is a 26 year old mexican paintress. She's a very beautiful woman because she's very tall, has a slender body with lighty tanned skin and has big natural b*****s. Jamie's has two sultry green eyes which brights like emeralds and her very long hair is dark blonde.

Jamie is also a cosmopolitan woman: part of her heritage is from the U.S.A. because her mother's family came from Missouri, she's part Spanish because her father's ancestors came from Cataluña and she's also part Czech from her mother's side. This cosmopolitism is also reflected in her name: Jamie Melissa Aracely.

Jamie began her love for painting at the tender age of 7 years old. Her father, who is an important businessman, hired one of the most famous mexican painters to give private classes to his daughter. At the age of 16, an important art merchant proposed Jamie to participate in an International Art Exposition that take place in Mexico City. Jamie accepted and her exposition was a success. After this, Jamie began to expose her work in the most important galleries of the world.

Another one of Jamie's hobbies is to swim. Because she lives in Jalisco, where she was born, and the climate of this state is warm all the year, she swims everyday. Jamie is also a lover of nature and life for this reason, she decided to give birth to her son at home with a midwife. This decision was very criticized by her friends who also qualificated her to be a m*******t. But Jamie didn't think so and she gave birth to her son in the intimity of her home.

DO YOU LIKE THIS DESCRIPTION OF THE CHARACTER?

Thank you very much!!!

Answer 1

It's well written, but the character is a bit unreal. I honestly wouldn't want to read about this character unless she had some sort of conflict or down-fall for her lack of flaws. Have you tried taking a Mary-Sue Litmus test? Follow the instructions on the site given, and you'll get your answer.

http://www.springhole.net/quizzes/marysu...

Answer 2

Heck Ya! She sounds almost perfect. LOL.

Answer 3

Yes. Thats very descriptive.The only thing that you should describe more is her personality. Like sarcastic, caring, short-tempered, etc.

Other than that, perfect

Answer 4

If you're writing this a reference piece then it's fine.  But if you're writing this as part of a story it's really choppy and hard to follow/read.  Either way though you might want to clean it up a little bit and make smoother to read.  Think of it as if you're describing a her to someone over the phone.  You want them to be able to visual her so that when they meet later there's no question what she looks like.  Right now it's really disjointed and confusing.