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Do you like this POEM called Poets Wonderland?

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"Maria in Poet`s Wonderland"

Musical notes dance to life.

Cerebrum wakes to bright light.

Imagination’s sprinting.

Neonman installed the light.

Is this Poets Olympics?

Hope I could finish this race,

Rhymes are dwelling in this place,

Metaphors flipping in place,

Brain is but a bouncy ball.

Ponders, wonders, thoughts, and all;

Live in Poet`s Wonderland.

Poets’s expand their wings and fly.

Pen`s and keyboards running free.

Wonderland bears hydro fruit,

Hydrating and sweet to taste.

Back to earth, time to awake.

Did I win or lose the race?

8/9/2008 ©Maria Santiago

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  1. Juicy juice running down my chin

    My friend took me through her looking glass

    Alight and aglow

    I'm moved

    To any square

    So cool,m2


  2. it is really good were did this person get the idea to write about this

  3. You did good.

  4. you deserve a medal for this one.  Great idea and imagery running through this. " Ponders, wonders, thoughts and all" is a wonderful line!

    Well done.

  5. You are singing well.  Counting syllables is a nice way to start working with meter, but don't forget sounds as you speak the words, the stressed/unstressed.  Hear the beat.  As to rhyme, try not to repeat the same word so often as it distracts.  Rhymezone is a great site for looking for additional rhyming words.  Since you speak 3 languages, you also have an advantage/disadvantage in using words and sounds.  Don't be afraid to mix them especially if they are words that people can phonetically pronounce.  Keep "rapping", free forming sounds to sing.

  6. You finished the race well, punctuation or not.

  7. "Hi!",

    How creative. Neonman will love this.

    Very creative. written well.

    Great imagery.

    I * M * P * R * E * S * S * I * V * E!

    WELL DONE!

    Cheers : )

    I had so much trouble posting last night with yahoo breather. It was rediculous. I am about to post one up again in a secound. I tried from half past 6 untill 4 am this morning and only got one post out by a fluke and didn't want to post it. If it comes up with a breather too day, I am going to find another poetry site.

    You did a wonderful job with this one. Keep them coming.

    Cheers : )


  8. You did fine, I can see the effort you put into it.

  9. You did really finished your race.

    It's a beautiful poem.

    I loved it!

    Light Bright for you!

  10. This was a very fun and good poem. You get stronger with each poem you write. The structure is a big improvement (I hope you take that in a good way :) )

    I have been writing the dark stuff tonight, so it was nice to see somethinf cheerful

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