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Question

I think I may have found my love,

After acting like a mourning dove.

The perfect man of my dreams

Has found my life, or so it seems.

I feel I love him with all my heart;

I hate it so when we're apart.

All the time I wish to be in school,

Even though it isn't cool.

Sometimes when I look into his eyes

I see the pain and the despise.

Is it meant for me?

So I ask to see

But instantly, it goes away,

Never does it ever stay

And he smiles,

If only for a little while.

His smile

Is definantly worth the while

Just to see it once a day,

That would take my pain away.

My pain would be gone,

And we'd get along,

And be happy forevermore.

Answer 1

This is bloody fantastic! You have a rare talent. Oh my, this is just so evocative!

Answer 2

It's sweet and your poem says something about being in school , you didn't mention your age!  It had a nice story, I did enjoy it, although not that fond of love poems in general!  Cheers !!!!

Answer 3

I lovvvveee itttt. It has a story behind it that many people could relate to. Its wonderful. I enjoyed reading it.

Answer 4

i absolutely luv it!! it relates to many people :D

congrats!

Answer 5

Well, it's definitely romantic enough, but some of your rhymes are a bit of a stretch, especially at the beginning. Like "even though it isn't cool"? That's a little lame. Also, you can't say "the despise." Despise is a verb, and you're using it as a noun. Overall, it's very heartfelt, and if you're boyfriend is the type who would appriciate that kind of thing, I would give it to him. It's a good poem: go for it!

Answer 6

yep

Answer 7

That put a smile on my face. All I would say is to add another line onto the last verse. Maybe like

"He is the man of my dreams, he is my open door..."?

It's only a suggestion. For you went the whole poem with 4 lines per verse and the last verse, in my open and honest opinion, should be like the rest.

As for sending it to your boyfriend, yes! Send it.