Do you like this poem? (plz read)?

Question

its not about me, i just made it up. comment plz

Black rivers running endlessly

From her eyes to her un-made cheeks

Sorrow and Depression,

Are glued to her soul

She is crushed into pieces,

Like broken glass,

And she cant put herself back together

Shes lost and in an empty world

So dark as a Halloween night

Crippled in a corner,

Too terrified to know whats going on

In her world,

Love and happiness has vanished away

Its Inaccesible

Answer 1

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Answer 2

i love it!

[wow!]

i love everything about it!

[great job!]

Answer 3

i liked it! but i would love if you made it rhyme! :/

i know not all poems rhyme, but its just my opinion! you have talent! though! a lot!

please.. read mine??

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?...

thank you:D

Answer 4

It's beautiful. You are very talented.

Answer 5

Great Metaphors and Similes. I think that this is really great! Maybe you should change "As a Halloween Night" to something else. Just saying. Over all this is great. I'm happy it's not about you! :D

Answer 6

I won't lie to you just to get 10 points from you

Trying to hard to be darker than it really is. Everything written is something I have seen numerous amounts of time on yahoo poetry. Its dark cliche. I think since it isnt about you, none of it rings very true, so the it doesnt seem to have much feeling behind it. Why not write about something you are really going through?

Answer 7

i think its really good!!

awesome job

try going a little more into detail if thats possibleee

lol

because it already has alot of detail

but maybe a little more wouldnt hurt and maybe try making it a little longer!

hope i helped!

keep up the awesome work!!

Answer 8

I like it a lot! You are really good at this :]

Answer 9

wow very heavy.

Answer 10

wow.

that is a really great poem.

very deep. and has plenty meaning.

its a poem some can relate to.