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Do you like this song I wrote for the High School talent show?

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it's not finished, but I do have some of it. It's with a guitar and the melody is beautiful.

I hear what you're saying,

But I can't listen.

Your face, your voice won't stand out

in this crowd today.

And I gave up on praying for you

After what you said to me that day

And the words echo in my head and replay all the time

Everyday another face, another start

Now, finally, I can write the notes of my heart

Chorus: I'm done pretending

you didn't hurt me, when you left me there, standing there, my heart on my sleeve. Im done pretending i love you anymore... this is the real me, and that's what this song is for.

(i havent written the second verse)

bridge: This is my declaration of "i dont care" . everyday you broke a piece of me, a piece here, a piece there, and i knew i never should have loved you, from the very start, cuz then I'd know how you left my mind, but you took my heart!

chorus ect, ect...

So that's idea #1

this is the chorus for idea #2

I wanna run away with you, say to you "I'll stay with you".

And I don't know how, I don't know why, but I wanna kiss your lips and close my eyes.

And I wanna feel the wind blowing my hair, I wanna laugh and love without a care... in the world. Cuz in my world it's only you and me.

The #2 is really fun, country, and upbeat. the first is country, and slightly defying? but it sounds great. What do you think?

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  1. Hey that's really cool. I think you've got talent. Look out for more competitions I think. (song-writing) You never know, you may win! Good luck with writing the rest of the song!


  2. I like it, it was great. That's so touching. Good luck, hope you win!

  3. I like it =)

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