Do you suffer from immense shyness?

Question

I do. :( I'm so painfully shy it's unreal. I was up 'til 6am last night writing this stupid poem, any good? Open to suggestions. I also claim ownership so no copying.

It's called "Audible Silence"

As the world spins

I'm locked into place, rooted to the spot

Silently pleading notification

Break the silence

Layers of immense pain and sorrow

Words of many shapes

Lay gathering dust, trapped inside the cage

Break the silence

As life slowly drags on

Yanking me further downward

A desperate attempt to squeeze words out

leaves tear-stained tracks on my broken skin

Break the silence

The silence escaping my lips

Wounds me far deeper

Than copious razor blade slashings

That soothes the soul

Break the silence

The ending really sucks, and needs major work, but I'm 15. I lack in poetic experience.

Answer 1

That's great! Really good stuff ^^

Answer 2

This is good.  

Answer 3

Yep, co author with Steven King.

Answer 4

i'm also very shy and i love to write and this poem is great!  i think the ending is fine.