Do you think i am a skilled poet?

Question

I am only 13. Do you think these are good? Please read thoroughly.

Morning

By Kina Wolfenstein

In the morning

Step out of bed

Into my slippers

I look out the window

Colors sprinting across my vision

A black blur

A white stripe

I see the tulips peeking out of the wet grass

I imagine that my dark yard is a forest

Where I fill with hot temper

Like an animal

Spines prickling

Tail pointed

I could pray on boring fear

Run along the river

Shuffles of scared footsteps

Coal colored eyes

Lying in the fields

Looking up at the world

Morning

what do you think?

Answer 1

umm... I'm 13 as well [[just turned]] and I don't get it. to me it seems that there is no central thought to the poem.

Perhaps I shall read it again...

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oh! It makes much more sense now! I like the idea you are trying to convey. Very good, very good indeed!!

Answer 2

boring

Answer 3

So, So

I like the concept though :D

Answer 4

Now this work falls within a tradition. Look up "Imagism," especially the work of "H.D." (Hilda Doolittle) and many of the circle surrounding William Carlos Williams (a fellow traveler and major poet in his own right). In a case like this, placing yourself in or next to a movement can be helpful--and the good poet is always made better by lots of reading.

Answer 5

u r just 13 at dis age u wrote, it is fantastic.by the passage of time u will b more good,perfect,accurate,because u would b having more&more knowledge.