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Do you think i should turn this into a novel?

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OK so i live about a block away from a Marshalls and in my dream i am in the Marshalls and i am looking for clothes at first and the first thing i notice is that there's A LOT of people in there and the second i notice is that its night time. then i hear light breathing from behind me so i turn around an something sweeps me up and next thing i know i am in the parking lot next to a car and the guy is telling me to get in. the first i notice about the guy is that he is amazingly gorgeous the second and third is hes strong and fast then i notice that his car says hes from Maine. i look in the car and there is 3 bodies in the back seat of the car so i get in the car because i for some odd reason trust him, and when i turn around to see the 3 people they are "what a surprise"-i think- gorgeous as h**l just like the guy i first met they all have dark circles under their perfect gold eyes and i notice they all have the same colored golden eyes, then when i turn back around we are already 4 miles away from the Marshalls driving the opposite way from my house, i ask where i am going and to my surprise i sound intrigued and in a sort excited, he had the most pleasant voice and he says" to my house why are you not the slightest bit afraid of us" i had nothing to say so all i said was "because there is nothing to be afraid of" and then he says (the driver the guy who got me) "I'm Joshua"- but his name varies from Joshua to James to Erik and back to Joshua and stayed at Joshua- then he says" that's Kate"-he directed to the girl behind me with dark brown short curly hair wearing a blue button up shirt with ruffles, dark blue jeans and brown cuff boots and a dark navy blue button sweater over the shirt not buttoned up - and then he says" that is Cody"- the boy in the middle with chestnut wavy hair and wearing a beige turtle neck,professional looking, and black pants, professional also,and black slick professional string up shoes and black socks i could see slightly out of his pants as he was sitting down- then he says "that is Jess"-the girl behind him, i didn't see what she was wearing because all i could see was her gorgeous face and i couldn't take my eyes off of it.

I looked back at him and i finally noticed that he was the most gorgeous among them all. and i asked him why i was in his car and why he was taking me to his house. he didn't reply, but Kate did she told me " you have a lot to be thankful for Lizabeth, you are very quiet lucky you met my brother Joshua on yahoo, thanks to me" and she flashed a great brilliant smile"i saw you writing him for some odd reason in my premonition, and i practically had to beg him to get online" and i smiled back but then i looked up at him again and i noticed he was smiling a very cute but innocent smile like he was embarrassed for having to be begged to get online for me, and i asked him "why did you want to talk to me, why would you drive all the way out here just to take me back to your house?" and then Cody jumped in for a split second before Kate interrupted he said"we were intrigued by the way you wrote and talked and we thought you would make..." and Kate interrupted " we thought you would make an excellent vampire" and she flashed a glance and a smile at Cody who glared back at her. then Jess asked" your not scared right, we can give you some more time, if it is needed" and i just looked at her unable to speak, then Joshua looked at me with curious eyes and laughed, he said " the way your emotions work and the way that your expressions change when you look at each one of my family members faces is really interesting to watch" he said this all with a smile, which for some reason made me mad and i said"oh you think its funny" and i glared at him, and he turned back to the road, then he spoke after about 3 minuets "you know its not that bad,"i looked at him curious "being a vampire, i mean" "oh" i said and i just looked at him and smiled. i asked him what he hunted and he told me it is hard to keep away from humans especially ones like me but they hunt animals mainly meat eaters. then we came to a stop, about 2 hours had passed because i drifted off to sleep.

Joshua shook me lightly and told me we were there, all i felt was a swift movement then the wind in my face, then i smelt a beautiful smell of perfumes and then i felt a comfy couch, and then i heard loud whispers, and i drifted off to sleep the last thing i heard was "she cant be here" i don't know the voice it was, not familiar to me. then i felt a staggering pain in my neck and a pain in my whole body and someone whisper that they were sorry in my ear, and the voice sounded like Joshua's, i tried to open my eyes but i hurt too bad everywhere. so i just laid there and tried not to scream every now and then i would moan and make a quiet squeal and i would feel a hand in mine suddenly and another hand cupping my face, i couldn't feel the hands only barely, and then i open my eyes and I'm in a brown room on a beige couch with nice lighting and big windows, i can see trees everywhere and flowers and bushes outsied the windows, i see air paticles and the dust and light waves floating throught the air in the room, and then i see people round me and they all in unison say happy first birthday its January 12th. and then i wake up.

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  1. tl;dr

    not a novel, a short story should be fine.  


  2. No. That sounds like a cheap Twilight rip-off. One twilight was bad enough

  3. you have GOT to be kidding me! so unoriginal. does it even sound a bit like Twilight to you? if not you have problems.

  4.      Sorry, love, but I got lost after the first half a dozen lines.  I, like 'myself'  is always written with a capital 'I'.  Learn to punctuate,  Get a book on English grammar and read it.  I think it's probably a good story, but go easy on the poor old reader!

    Good luck

    Mike B

  5. wow. I bet the last book you just read was Breaking Dawn. No, use your own imagination and this wouldn't work any way because it is too cliche with the Twilight series.

  6. i personally think that would be a WONDERFUL novel....i would enjoy reading more....

    PS lots of the stories i've written were from dreams.....including one of my best...

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