Do you think my poem is okay?

Question

wrapping that string around my heart i cried

you made me feel what i've always wanted to, but i didn't know

it would be like this

it hurts

it plays with me

my thoughts that ran smooth

run rampid

Answer 1

You ask what it is we think,

But I ask that of you.

Is it from the heart?

That is a start!

Write for you,

Not for us,

But we will comment all the same,

And post our own,

'Cause thats the game!

I like your poem, but it needs a little more rhythm and even lines, keep writing though!