Do you think this is a good poem? im kinda...eh about it.

Question

You didnt just break my heart,

You didnt just tear it apart,

You rippped it up in little peices

and put it through despair,

But most of all, you killed it

Its unfixable, its unreplaceable

just face it, its over

Answer 1

the last line doesn't fit. otherwise it's good

Answer 2

I loved the first four lines, but you kind of lost the rhythm and feel of the poem after that. I think you would write a lot better if you tried to rhyme it.

I'd also advise you to fix your last line. Somehow, it doesn't seem as serious as the first lines and kind of dampens the whole point of the poem.



But overall, good job. =D

Answer 3

you didn't just break my heart,

no,

you shredded it into a million microscopic pieces,

and like Humpty Humpty,

my heart can not be put back together.