Do you think this make sense?

Question

do you think this make sense?

waking up to the nasty smell of dirty rubbish, the irritating road workers trying to extend the narrow roads and the deafening cars beeping their car trying to get out of the traffic to get to work was definitely frustrating.

if it doesn't make sense please tell me where it went wrong and i'll correct it.

thanks

Answer 1

The only problem I can see is the repetition of 'cars beeping their car' was it meant to be 'cars beeping their horns'?

If it was then it seems fine to me!

Answer 2

Well, your the one along with others that have the same problem. We "humans" tend" to get mad over things we have no control over=)...Is it wrong? It depends whether it is affecting your life in a bad or good way... I guess=)

Answer 3

It should read  "beeping their horns" then a comma.  Other than that it is ok.

Answer 4

"beeping their car horns"

Answer 5

...noise of people(instead of cars).....horns............................

Answer 6

Yes

Answer 7

More punctuation needed.

Answer 8

move house

Answer 9

sorry I don't mean to be affencive but it sounds like someone wakin up as a tramp livin on the street on top of rubbish bags on a busy street                    

                                        SOZ!

Answer 10

Poor you. Sounds like waking up at yours is a nightmare!  "beeping their horns, trying to get"   that little section needs to read like that, forget the word car. Replace with horns and add a commer.

Answer 11

Move to a different bus shelter

Answer 12

It might make sense if you could spell properly.