Do you think this poem that I wrote is good? Im thinking about submitting it in a poetry contest?

Question

YOU

My mind is always racing with adoring thoughts of you.

I find its hard to control myself when you walk into the room.

My body still anticipates your every little touch.

I never though I could ever feel this way, or ever feel so much

My soul is attached to you. Just like every life before.

And everytime we meet again, I want you even more.

I couldnt imagine living without you.

I dont even want to try.

'Cause life without my LOVE, my FRIEND,

Would make me want to cry.

So if I ever made you think that I could ever live without you;

Just know that it was all an act.

Because my life revolves around you.

Answer 1

It maybe about you

but the poem is also

about friendship

the good times

The first line talks about

thinking of you

as you anticipate the touches

You can't get enough

because it talks about your soul

with life before

meeting each time you want more

Then the sadness because unable to

live without your friend no matter how hard you try

It is true you would cry without my love and friend

Answer 2

It's pretty good accept the ending needs more of a fantastic "you're happy you read this" ending. i would send it in the way it is right now.

Answer 3

It's a little poor but give it a shot cause who am i to judge?!

Answer 4

That's sweet.

Quit simple, but sweet and I hope that whoever you wrote that for appreciated it...

Good luck on winning the contest!

Answer 5

I think its far to "wordy" and the  "you" four times at the end of the stanza does not do it justice.

This is how i see your poem:-

My mind races with adoring thoughts

My body still anticipates your touch.

I control myself when you walk in the room.

Never thought I’d feel this way, or so much

I couldn't  imagine living without you.

My soul is attached like every life before

No, I don’t even want to try

Every time we meet, I want you more.



I could never live without your love?

All my life revolves around what we do.

We are made like hand and glove

This is not an act, I love you.

Answer 6

yes it is xoxox

Answer 7

I think it's beautiful. ^____^ It'd be really good in a poetry contest. Good luck!

Answer 8

once you settle that rhyme scheme a bit, it's all good :)

Answer 9

Hey that's one nice little poem..keep up the good work and best of luck!

Answer 10

I love it....it's way sweet....I wish I had talent like you.

Answer 11

yeah its good

Answer 12

It gives me a toothache

Answer 13

i love it. its awesome. i expected it to be corny but you really proved me wrong! good job

Answer 14

I would just change the first 2 lines.  Last time I checked "you" and "room" didn't rhyme and I think since the rest of the poem does, you should change that.